Thursday, December 3, 2009

Here is yet another 5 liner, Comments??

Would like your comments and critiques.



Please no ES'ers



"No longer a trapped beast with gnashing teeth and snarls



As remembered clamorous routines flicker in scented flames



Shadowed images of Death deprived now in Life



A dovelike self-control evolves



I thank myself for now coming home."



Here is yet another 5 liner, Comments??

I loved it!!!!! I thought it was great!!!!! Good job! It really has a meaning too! Thats the kind of poetry I write



Here is yet another 5 liner, Comments??

I liked the chosen imagery and theme. I am looking, however, for structure, which I do not see. I am rather strict in my writings regarding syllables and meter and have a hard time getting a grasp of free-style, which is what I assume this is. I am hoping to learn more from other poets' critiques on your poem. So, I shall see you soon.

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