What do you think of the lyrics i have written for my rock band?? pleae give me any comments you hav

scrumpled bits of paper getting thrown across the floor,

when you are trying to paint a memory,

bordering on a thought

chorus:

messed obsessed woahhh

nothing really matters when your second best

then my other verses:

seeing graffiti scribbled on every city wall

longing to write in that untidy scrawl

cant they see the bins out of throwing range?

still they threaten our ways must change

clothes strewn across the floor.. unmade bed

but none of this nagging really gets to my head...

thats all so far... any comments please=)

What do you think of the lyrics i have written for my rock band?? pleae give me any comments you have..???=)?

sounds good to me, but i think it all depends on how the song sounds. you orobably should try to add a few more lines in but what you have is a good start.

What do you think of the lyrics i have written for my rock band?? pleae give me any comments you have..???=)?

I feel like i've seen those lyrics before.

Not very original in my opinion..

RQ.

What do you think of the lyrics i have written for my rock band?? pleae give me any comments you have..???=)?

If you lengthened a few verses and threw in a bridge or a pre-chorus, it would be awesome. =]

What do you think of the lyrics i have written for my rock band?? pleae give me any comments you have..???=)?

Not bad.. just make it flow better. I know how hard it is to write a song, im in a band too. I really like the chorus!! Good luck

What do you think of the lyrics i have written for my rock band?? pleae give me any comments you have..???=)?

Maybe Marilyn Manson could sing this one.

What do you think of the lyrics i have written for my rock band?? pleae give me any comments you have..???=)?

Quite nice, but I would pay more attention to grammar and punctuation (sorry, I'm fussy).